His shoes were untied, his tie was loose and his shirt looked like it had been ironed with a steamroller. “I need your help," he said. A FIVE-MINUTE story
I see an undercurrent of wisdom in this story. Elements of universal truths slipped in with Tarot readings and a djellaba-clad man quietly learning himself.
I love the resonance inside the shell of this writing❣️
Thank you, Jill, for this kind comment. My writing is up and down. Some of my stories are worthy of revision and tighter editing, but, some, I admit, I just toss out.
Gatibel is a pretty name. I remember this story, Sharron. It must be pheromones, two available adults in close proximity, why else would he be standing out in the rain?? : ) “I think I need your help,” - a good pickup line? Gatibel has things well in hand. You've described such a warm setting for them.
Thanks for having a second look, Ron. I have three years of stories in the archive, and I like to bring out some of my better ones for revision. The process reminds me of how much my writing has improved 1.) through daily practice and 2.) from continued reading of other Substack writers as models.
I get what you are saying, Sharron. I can see my improvement when I look at my early stuff. I could use more daily writing and I do enjoy reading my favs, of which you are one, on Substack. . Hope some of what they have will rub off on me.
He came to her door in need of warmth and comfort. She provided it. I'm pretty sure I would do the same - even if it was only to offer a blanket and a listening ear? I know you would, too, Kate.
A fortune teller. Time to pick some stocks or head to the track. I think she put a spell on him, Sharron. You certainly created a romantic setting and a vulnerable male to place in it. It has been interesting to follow your treck through various genres. You have a wide-ranging talent.
Thank you Kathleen. My stories rarely have nice neat endings. Most are left open on purpose for the readers' imaginations to finish. I am so glad they suit you.
Yes, Sharron...if we just took the time to let the truth reveal itself...but we seem to be looking for magic to happen TO us, in everything from social media, to mega churches.
Do you see God at work in this story? I do!
What a sweet thing to say, Kim. Thank you. Some lucky people see god-work in every good thing. I wish I knew what God was doing.
I'm sure He has His hands full changing the hearts of unbelievers! So many millions of people don't even I now who Jesus is! Its sad.
Ah yes, that is true, they don't, Kim. But then, they might know who Muhammad is, or Moses, or Baha'u'llah or Zoroaster or Gautama Buddha or...
I see an undercurrent of wisdom in this story. Elements of universal truths slipped in with Tarot readings and a djellaba-clad man quietly learning himself.
I love the resonance inside the shell of this writing❣️
Thank you, Jill, for this kind comment. My writing is up and down. Some of my stories are worthy of revision and tighter editing, but, some, I admit, I just toss out.
Tossed salad improves the lovely juxtapositions that life throws at us until we just smile that hematic smile that might mean anything in the world.
Gatibel is a pretty name. I remember this story, Sharron. It must be pheromones, two available adults in close proximity, why else would he be standing out in the rain?? : ) “I think I need your help,” - a good pickup line? Gatibel has things well in hand. You've described such a warm setting for them.
Thanks for having a second look, Ron. I have three years of stories in the archive, and I like to bring out some of my better ones for revision. The process reminds me of how much my writing has improved 1.) through daily practice and 2.) from continued reading of other Substack writers as models.
I get what you are saying, Sharron. I can see my improvement when I look at my early stuff. I could use more daily writing and I do enjoy reading my favs, of which you are one, on Substack. . Hope some of what they have will rub off on me.
Boy! did SHE set him up!!
He came to her door in need of warmth and comfort. She provided it. I'm pretty sure I would do the same - even if it was only to offer a blanket and a listening ear? I know you would, too, Kate.
Half drowned neighbor? sure I'd dry him off, but the way she interpreted the cards led him to her bedroom. )))
Probably the highlight of his year so far. ha ha ha
Hoping for a sequel…. As I often find myself in reading your cliffhangers..
Hmmm. Not sure of a continuing relationship here. I am feeling this may have been just a moment of awakening for Daniel.
A fortune teller. Time to pick some stocks or head to the track. I think she put a spell on him, Sharron. You certainly created a romantic setting and a vulnerable male to place in it. It has been interesting to follow your treck through various genres. You have a wide-ranging talent.
Hah! Thanks for your encouragement, KC, I do appreciate that, my friend.
Sharron, I love all of your stories. They're also interesting and intriguing and the endings the best.
Thank you Kathleen. My stories rarely have nice neat endings. Most are left open on purpose for the readers' imaginations to finish. I am so glad they suit you.
Good 😊. Daniel was provided with a comfort he needed.
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Yes, Sharron...if we just took the time to let the truth reveal itself...but we seem to be looking for magic to happen TO us, in everything from social media, to mega churches.
Thank you, Sharon. I loved YOUR little memoir this morning over at the Gopher Farm. Bitter-sweet.
The old “I prefer my own quiet company” dodge always used by people who are lonely and who absolutely don’t want their own company.
Good one, Sharon.
Thank you Switter. Now get back out there on that trail!
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