Space and Time
Which version will you choose? A story in exactly 50 words
A 50-word story — but which version do you prefer? Why? Let me know in the comments.
A. )
It was such a cliché.
“It’s not you, it’s me,” she’d said. “I love you, but I need some space, some time to find myself.”
“No worries,” he said. “I stopped caring, you know, a long time ago.”
She’d already figured that out.
Now she’s alone and can finally breathe.
B.)
It was such a cliché.
“It’s not you, it’s me,” she’d said. “I love you, but I need space, some time to find myself.”
“Go then,” he said. “It hurts too much to keep on trying.”
Now she’s free, and can’t remember why time and space were so damned important.
I prefer B. It has more pathos and mystery.
I love this. I chose second one. I’ve thought about writing an entire short story, one in first person one in third person in a second post and seeing which people prefer. Seems a little too meta for me though.