Yes. I am sure the reader can fill in the rest of the story. We all have ideas of why relationships fall apart, don't we? Sometimes ( not always) it feels like less is better.
Thanks for giving it a second look. I revised it, added a photo and some music. I think it is more interesting now. I look forward to seeing what YOU are working on.
Glad you found the music interesting, Sue. I find the Danish duo Bremer / McCoy to be soothing and a hopeful kind of music, albeit New Age. This piece, titled Åben Bog (Open Book) is from their album Utopia.
Thank you, Jim. I revised it this time and added a photo and some music. Experimentation... Since you are taking a wee break, how about re-posting a few of your best!
Thank you, Yael. I thought so, too. I hope you will explore some of Bremer/McCoy music ( Youtube). I find them very calming at the end of the day. You might, too.
I had three different interpretations of this piece after each read through - absolutely brilliant story telling and a real lesson in subtext (which I will now personally work to improve!) - thanks for an inspiring read.
Your comment made me gasp, Mr O'Hare. And then I cried. I take writing so seriously -- too seriously. My diligence is absolutely driven. Sometimes I succeed and often I don't. This comment of yours is such a gift, one that I, myself, have sent to two other writers - Jim Cummings and Jim Wilsky. I admire them so much and I never dreamed anyone would say it to me. I am so touched. You have changed my perception and for that I thank you. I will run over to Lamposts now and see what's up there.
Oh wow - well I can definitely say the pleasure was all mine. I haven't been writing for a long time (only a few years), but I know I'm a fast learner, and I feel like your craft in this story really opened a doorway in my mind. These are the kind of story's I'm looking for right now! Look forward to reading more.
Like doesn't show a tenth of the short story, so I'll express it another way: Compelling and forceful and unfortunately totally truth of fiction.
Yes. I am sure the reader can fill in the rest of the story. We all have ideas of why relationships fall apart, don't we? Sometimes ( not always) it feels like less is better.
I remember this one, Sharron, my hands are cold and deep in my pockets.
Thanks for giving it a second look. I revised it, added a photo and some music. I think it is more interesting now. I look forward to seeing what YOU are working on.
I believe The Supremes song “Arret” in the name of love , comes to mind. The frozen sign says it all too.
Hah! Yes. "Think it over!" she said
Chilling, in every way.
Brrrr.
Brilliant. This says so much and yet leaves so much to the imagination.
I am pretty sure each one of us can imagine what might have caused the riff. So many possibilities...
Interesting juxtaposition of that sad story and the hopeful Utopia music. Then again, the music did end on a indefinite phrase. Excellent.
Glad you found the music interesting, Sue. I find the Danish duo Bremer / McCoy to be soothing and a hopeful kind of music, albeit New Age. This piece, titled Åben Bog (Open Book) is from their album Utopia.
One of my favorite of your pieces, Sharron.
Thank you, Jim. I revised it this time and added a photo and some music. Experimentation... Since you are taking a wee break, how about re-posting a few of your best!
The Danish Duo is very well suited to the story. Thanks i
Thank you, Yael. I thought so, too. I hope you will explore some of Bremer/McCoy music ( Youtube). I find them very calming at the end of the day. You might, too.
"He breathes in frozen moonlight..." It's passages like this that make your writing so enjoyable, Sharron. A beautiful portrait of loss and despair.
Thank you, Ken. So glad we found each other. I am a big fan!
I can feel the bitter cold setting in my bones. A chilling tale!
Leaves quite a bit to the imagination.
I had three different interpretations of this piece after each read through - absolutely brilliant story telling and a real lesson in subtext (which I will now personally work to improve!) - thanks for an inspiring read.
Your comment made me gasp, Mr O'Hare. And then I cried. I take writing so seriously -- too seriously. My diligence is absolutely driven. Sometimes I succeed and often I don't. This comment of yours is such a gift, one that I, myself, have sent to two other writers - Jim Cummings and Jim Wilsky. I admire them so much and I never dreamed anyone would say it to me. I am so touched. You have changed my perception and for that I thank you. I will run over to Lamposts now and see what's up there.
Oh wow - well I can definitely say the pleasure was all mine. I haven't been writing for a long time (only a few years), but I know I'm a fast learner, and I feel like your craft in this story really opened a doorway in my mind. These are the kind of story's I'm looking for right now! Look forward to reading more.
I write mostly micro-fiction. You might take a look at this selection of 50-word stories. Some are very successful, but, of course, not all.
https://sharronbassano.substack.com/s/50-words
I think that will be my Sunday evening covered! Cheers Sharron.
Ha ha ha - sorry. No obligation whatsoever. I just wanted you to see what a "section" looks like.
Oh gosh, this is bone chilling! Feels soooo real. x
Thanks, Rebecca. I know it requires a bit of imagination on the part of the reader, but any interpretation is the right one.