Great story told in a unique way. You capture the spirit of adventure and romance that drives a young person to explore the world on their own. Love it!
"she hugged me, right there in the market, surrounded by all these piles of fish". I love the irony of the setting - man gulps down delicious bait and gets pulled to face bad consequences. And then, he's miraculously off the hook. What a delectable story!!!
I enjoyed the one-sided conversation structure, and well done, Sharron. I was in the moment, with every word, and the visuals, the emotions...the open-ended dénouement. Skill and craft well honed. Thank you!
Gina Wait
Great story, I am glad you made it a happy ending. I liked the technique you used, no traditional dialog.
Loved this, Sharron.
It felt fresh & snappy.
You go girl!
Interrrrrestinggg!
I hope she waited.
Great story told in a unique way. You capture the spirit of adventure and romance that drives a young person to explore the world on their own. Love it!
Ha! Cool twists and turns there. Fooled me! Very nice, Sharron!
I loved this story and wasn’t expecting the ending.
This so, so, so sweet...! And it brought back memories.... Five stars, Sharon!
Its not the ending is it... ))))
You are the master of sucking me in and leaving me hanging! HaHa!
Wow, yay to Gina for redeeming herself! That ending was such a surprise - and a perfect one, at that.
Loved this line: "She made me feel sort of … competent. You know what I mean?"
I DO know what he means. That recognition of something new when you're exploring the idea of getting to know someone.
Such a lovely post, Sharron!
Maybe you're right. She's already proven thief, so not a good candidate for relationship. BYE Girlie!
Sounds like it to me too hahahaha
Traveling alone at 20 is just asking for trouble. 🤣
"she hugged me, right there in the market, surrounded by all these piles of fish". I love the irony of the setting - man gulps down delicious bait and gets pulled to face bad consequences. And then, he's miraculously off the hook. What a delectable story!!!
I enjoyed the one-sided conversation structure, and well done, Sharron. I was in the moment, with every word, and the visuals, the emotions...the open-ended dénouement. Skill and craft well honed. Thank you!