Love your little phrases like 'dill his pickle' and 'swallowed an owl'. I'm no expert but I think you tend to switch points of view a lot and tell people what's going on rather than showing them. E.G., that loser in the bar thought he was going to get lucky but you told us rather than showing us. Hope you don't mind my unqualified advice. Stories were great!
Love your little phrases like 'dill his pickle' and 'swallowed an owl'. I'm no expert but I think you tend to switch points of view a lot and tell people what's going on rather than showing them. E.G., that loser in the bar thought he was going to get lucky but you told us rather than showing us. Hope you don't mind my unqualified advice. Stories were great!
Thank you for this comment, Stu. You are absolutely correct. I try very hard to keep my own comments and opinions out of the story, but I am not always successful. It is a failing I have yet to conquer. ( Feel free to point it out to me anytime. It helps! ) Thanks so much for reading and for your new subscription!
Love your little phrases like 'dill his pickle' and 'swallowed an owl'. I'm no expert but I think you tend to switch points of view a lot and tell people what's going on rather than showing them. E.G., that loser in the bar thought he was going to get lucky but you told us rather than showing us. Hope you don't mind my unqualified advice. Stories were great!
Thank you for this comment, Stu. You are absolutely correct. I try very hard to keep my own comments and opinions out of the story, but I am not always successful. It is a failing I have yet to conquer. ( Feel free to point it out to me anytime. It helps! ) Thanks so much for reading and for your new subscription!