This gets more and more intriguing. You have developed the setting beautifully, I can picture every detail of the house and the surroundings. The ominous flashing in the night sky, coming closer on succcessive evenings and Hamish's reaction--resigned and maybe not surprised.
The dialect is spot-on.
A little surprise at the end!
You've gotten us down the rabbit hole now. We'll be waiting for more!
I agree with what Jim said above on all accounts! I’m getting more and more immersed in this story/setting, and find myself wanting more. These characters have great chemistry with one another and I can see this as the beginning of a long relationship. Their interactions and dialogue (not to mention everything going on around them in the background) would keep me turning pages for a long time.
Message to Me: The essential need and desire for Connection is all ways, and especially at times of crisis, separation and isolation. For me, "Mission accomplished." I am complete. Thank You, Master Story Teller. You had me in the point of Your pen.
I am getting all kinds of vibes, end of days scenario and the difference in language and alien element reminds me of "Enemy Mine" one of my favourite movies growing up.
Wow Sharron,
This gets more and more intriguing. You have developed the setting beautifully, I can picture every detail of the house and the surroundings. The ominous flashing in the night sky, coming closer on succcessive evenings and Hamish's reaction--resigned and maybe not surprised.
The dialect is spot-on.
A little surprise at the end!
You've gotten us down the rabbit hole now. We'll be waiting for more!
The intrigue deepens....! And now I'm hungry for turnips - I feel I'm right there, Sharron!
Wow. Wonderful. Fantastic. Timely.
I can see it all in my mind. Good writing makes a movie in my head.
Intriguing. Disturbing.
I agree with what Jim said above on all accounts! I’m getting more and more immersed in this story/setting, and find myself wanting more. These characters have great chemistry with one another and I can see this as the beginning of a long relationship. Their interactions and dialogue (not to mention everything going on around them in the background) would keep me turning pages for a long time.
Message to Me: The essential need and desire for Connection is all ways, and especially at times of crisis, separation and isolation. For me, "Mission accomplished." I am complete. Thank You, Master Story Teller. You had me in the point of Your pen.
Oh, Sharron, now you've done it. The orange glow and the rumbling have now reached Perth.
Is it going to come closer??? What's going to happen????
Sharron.... you can't keep us all not knowing.
We.
Need.
Resolution.
Ha ha... if there's no Part 3, that's okay. I do enjoy open-ended stories. Thank you for "Surrender".
I am getting all kinds of vibes, end of days scenario and the difference in language and alien element reminds me of "Enemy Mine" one of my favourite movies growing up.